I missed last week, and this week’s entry to the Friday Fictioneers is light at a mere 41 words. But I really, really mean them.
when the chairs are folded
and the stands laid flat
and every last instrument
is fitted forever
each to their own velvety case
and the night quiets to crickets
and jasmine blooms unscented on sleeping wind
i will love you
still
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Thanks Rochelle & David Stewart & all the Friday Fictioneers.
Fantastic as always. You were sorely missed last week. Your voice is one of my favorites and I look forward to your entries with delicious anticipation.
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I REALLY LIKE THIS. Such a serene picture you paint.
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sweet poem
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I think the whole point of the 100-words is that is not about quantity, but quality, and this is great. To me it portrayed longing, like ‘I’ll keep loving you no matter what, ’till the end of all.”
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Thanks! I wasn’t sure if I was cheating. But it seemed ‘done’, so I stopped writing. 🙂
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Amen, Sister. If you can say it in less than 100 words, more power to ya.
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I can’t do things like this. I’m jealous.
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So so beautiful. Every word perfect.
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Beautifully written, and lovely to read.
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Lyrical and lovely.
MJ
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So lovely.. we might all love the music.. but there are moments when we just wait for the cricket’s song…
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well done.
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Mom?
Mom!
Nice to see you 🙂
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Beautiful, and perfect in 41 🙂
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Brilliant. Short, impactful, meaningful. An excellent use of 41 words.
KT
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Amazing – kept reading again and again… magic of note and silence – and love, along and beyond! Superb !
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That’s simply beautiful.
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Dear Karen,
You made every word count. Lovely.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Lovely feelings; lovely language.
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It sings like scripture from Ecclesiastes or Song of Solomon. Beautiful.
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Very beautiful, sweet, and heartfelt. 41 words of endless love. 🙂
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This goes right to the heart. Very beautiful.
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Beautiful. I can say more but your poem is so precious and fragile that I don’t want to risk spoiling it. I just want to go back and read it again.
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Confession. I used “Still” as a bit of inspiration for mine. This was the first time I had written my Friday Fictioneer story as a poem. After reading yours, I thought I’d try just see what kind of response I’d get. It worked! So, thank you for the muse.
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My first FF poem too! I loved yours. I’ve never acted as muse! Thanks 🙂
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That is so beautiful! 🙂
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Beautiful. Short but sweet. 🙂
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Full of emotion. Beautiful.
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You said all I needed to know about this relationship – lovely.
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Lovely lovely poem. Full of sound and image and atmosphere and emotion and even a rather poignant mystery, as we don’t have a complete story. I’m not quite sure why the jasmine is blooming unscented, as the smell is very strong and sweet – like your poem! Well done, indeed! 🙂
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Thanks for your kind words! Good point about the jasmine (one of my favorite things). I was thinking the jasmine was unscented because no one was around to ‘scent’ it. But yeah, not sure if it works.
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You had just the right amount of words!
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Such words of love. Beautiful 🙂
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41 lovely words – any more would have been wasted. I think your poem would naturally follow my story this week. Tracery
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You’re right, that would make an excellent accompaniment!
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Lovely poetic work.
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What a treat! And I almost missed it – just going back to read “one more” from the early entries and clicked on your story. Like a soft breeze on a summer night, this.
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Dear K,
This was a beautiful poem and those are words I rarely apply to such endeavors. Very well written from perfect title to serene conclusion. Music to my ears.
Aloha,
Doug
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Short but powerful, this really touched me. Beautiful writing. 🙂
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Beautiful.
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Nicely done. If the readers connect with your writing then the word count doesn’t matter at all.
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That was a heartwarming way to express deep love. It’s so peaceful. 🙂 — Suzanne
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