This Year’s River

PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson (Many thanks for the gracious loan of your photo. 😉

This year’s river ain’t no ankle wetter,
no minnow chaser,
no roll up your pant legs for a sunny Sunday wade.

This year’s river ain’t no trout fisher,
No flat-stone skipper,
no Sunday supper-dinner all strung up on a string.

This year’s river ain’t no parasol spinner,
no baptizing sinner,
no check-blanket picnic in the shade.

No, this year’s river is a bridge-out blocker, a gully road washer, a sweep you off the banks, because—

This year’s river is a baby-child taker, a widow-man maker, a trade-your-everything for mud, because—

This year’s river is a flood.


96 words (if you forgive liberal hyphenation-for-effect)
104 words (if you do not)

This has been an edition of Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. This week’s photo courtesy Dale Rogerson. To read more stories inspired by the prompt, click here.

54 Comments

  1. Loved this the repetition and the imagery, well done – and lovely to see you back on FriFic too 🙂

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    1. Thanks Iain, great to be here!

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    1. Thank you kindly, Neel.

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  2. Love the tumbling rhythm here. It would make a great song. Well done.

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    1. Very kind of you. Now can you write some music to go with? 🙂

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  3. Lovely, entertaining read – well done, Karen!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  4. Dear Karen,

    I agree with Josh. It would make a good song. Hope he’ll set it to music for you. 😉 Love the rhythm and the voice. “widow-man-maker” is brilliant. I am forgiving of hyphens. Use them myself. Well done and happy to see you in the FF queue.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Great to be here. Thanks for your kind words. Good to know your verdict on the hyphens for when I slip in my 456-word story next week 😉

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      1. Now that I might take a bit of issue with. 😉 There are limits, my dear.

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  5. Lovely, turbulent, musical torrent

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  6. Makes the point brilliantly.

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  7. Very well done. And, yep, that sounds like this year’s river…

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    1. I hope you stayed out of the river’s crest where you are. Thanks for reading!

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  8. Terrific, powerful, rhythmic. Very well done.

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    1. Thanks so much, Sandra

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  9. Brilliant, Karen! Have to agree, that rhythm got some groove to become a song.

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    1. I need Josh to compose a tune. Or perhaps are you a musician?

      This is a lovely spot in your picture–is it a place you get to visit often? Or one you only visit now in your photos?

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      1. I wish I were…

        It’s in Woodstock, N.Y. I went there to meet a friend half-way…☺

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      2. Aw…but what a great place to meet up!

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      3. Absolutely! And the next one was in Brooklyn a couple of weeks ago!

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  10. Fantastic writing, you really carry the reader along with your words.

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  11. Chilling, all the way to the end. The pacing and progression are wonderful, as with a flood, the poem gets deeper with every line… until the last one overflows taking everything.

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    1. So glad you liked it. Thanks for reading!

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  12. Poetic piece had me dancing along till the final fall.

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    1. I’m so glad! Thanks for reading ceayr 🙂

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  13. Loved this. Sounds like it should be put to music.

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  14. Frightening stuff, I like this muchly and am happy to accept the 96 word count!,

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    1. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  15. A stunning and elegant poetic message. Beautifully done.

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    1. Thanks so much! Glad you liked it.

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  16. Wow, loved this one, really powerful piece. Well done! 🙂

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  17. Love the progression of the water becoming deeper and deeper. Nicely done.

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  18. Nice one, great rhythm.

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  19. I agree with J Hardy Carroll – it would make a great song.

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  20. Love the clear descriptive words, the rhythm, an almost floating-down-the-river sensation 🙂

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    1. So glad it worked for you. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  21. That was great! Such a fun read!

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    1. Thanks for reading 🙂

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  22. I thought this absolutely brilliant, the language, the similes, the imagery the lot, thanks.

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    1. Thanks for your very kind words!

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  23. Great writing – full of energy and images tumbling over each other like the river – so skilfully expressed.

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    1. Thanks so much Francine!

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  24. Love the rhythm of this powerful piece. Nicely done!

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    1. Glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by!

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  25. First of all I love your use of repetitive negation… a technique I love myself… then of course the conclusion which made me think of all devastation we have seen and what future will bring

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