Friday Fictioneers: Talk Parties

PHOTO PROMPT © Fatima Fakier Deria

“She’s doing it again,” he said.

I went to the kitchen window to see. Katie had taken over Gran’s old patio set for her ‘talk parties’, as she called them. She’d snatch fruit from the fridge drawer, and put out cups and plates. “Who’s she talking to, you think?”

He folded his arms over his chest. “Gran, I suppose. I know she misses her. But sometimes she says other names. Does the name ‘Annamarie’ mean anything to you?”

I felt myself go pale. “I think it’s time we talk to someone,” I said.

“A counselor?”

“No, a psychic.”

98 words. This has been an edition of Friday Fictioneers, hosted by the gracious and talented Rochelle. This week’s photo copyright Fatima Fakier Deria. To read more stories inspired by the prompt, or to submit your own, click here.

55 Comments

  1. Neil MacDonald's avatar

    Great first line, Great last line

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  2. rochellewisoff's avatar

    Dear Karen,

    You started out with light and fluffy and took me to dark and chilling. Reminiscent of some Twilight Zones I recall. Very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Now you have me humming the Twilight Zone music. Thanks for reading.

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  3. The Writer's Village's avatar

    Good flash.
    Annamarie, huh?

    Randy

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Thanks Randy. Thanks for reading.

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  4. J Hardy Carroll's avatar

    Intriguing piece. I have seen my grandmother from time to time, especially in dreams. She usually has to remind me she’s dead. Well done.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Spooky! Thanks for reading.

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  5. Keith's Ramblings's avatar

    That took a bit of a spooky turn! Excellent.

    Click to read my 99 words!

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  6. Iain Kelly's avatar

    Yep, time to get some advice certainly, there are some things parents aren’t qualified to help with!

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      It seems so! Thanks for reading and commenting Iain!

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  7. James Pyles's avatar

    King Saul tried that and actually got the Prophet Samuel’s spirit back from the dead. It didn’t end well.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Ha, well hope they don’t go there. Thanks for reading and commenting James.

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  8. pennygadd51's avatar

    You tell that story very well, moving smoothly and inexorably from the intriguing first line to the creepy last line. Super skill!

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Aw Penny, thank you for your most kind words. Glad you liked it!

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  9. peterkirsch's avatar
    peterkirsch

    “I felt myself go pale.” Love it.
    Cold shivers on this one. Something about the undead targeting children–Poltergeist, Amityville Horror–it has always chilled me to the bone.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      You have me feeling a little uneasy. Hope it doesn’t wind up like any of them! Thanks for reading.

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  10. trentpmcd's avatar

    Hmm, now I’m curious on who Annamarie is. Or I guess I should say, ‘who Annamarie was’.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Yes indeed, who she was…Thanks so much for reading Trent!

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  11. Sandra's avatar

    There’s something extra creepy about ghosts when only children can see/feel them. Well done.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Thanks Sandra, glad you liked it!

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  12. EagleAye's avatar

    Awesome. A great zinger at the end. I was going for the spirit angle at first and changed my mind. I’m glad you went with it.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      I like the way you took your story! Still laughing (and crying).

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      1. EagleAye's avatar

        I have the same mixed emotions. Ironically, my wordpress posts automatically get posted on my Facebook account!

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  13. Dale's avatar
    Dale

    Oohh! I love it. There are things that we regular mortals cannot explain. Definitely time to bring in extra help…

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Thanks Dale, yes I think it’s professional help. 🙂

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      1. Dale's avatar
        Dale

        Oh yes! 😀

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  14. jillyfunnell's avatar

    That’s strange but it’s not unlikely in my opinion. I moved house when my daughter was four and as we were unpacking she pointed to a picture of my great-grandmother and said “That’s my sister.” Your story reminded me of that inexplicable moment.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Oh wow! That is very cool. My son wants did something very similar. There are more things in heaven and earth…

      Thanks for reading!

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  15. mitchrey1990's avatar

    Great piece. The last line was really good.

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  16. Lynn Love's avatar

    Ooh, lovely story. I like the way you launch us straight into the action – a gret story teller’s technique. I want to know who Annamarie is now! Nicely done Karen

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Aw, thanks so much for your kind words!

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      1. Lynn Love's avatar

        My pleasure Karen

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  17. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist's avatar

    A good story that suddenly turned at the last second turning it into a cliff hanger with many unanswered questions. Now I want to know why she turned pale at the mention of Annemarie’s name.

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  18. draliman's avatar

    Yeek! The whole family’s come back for tea with Katie 🙂

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      It seems they did! Thanks for reading 🙂

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  19. granonine's avatar

    Katie sounds like maybe SHE’S the psychic 🙂

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      It does seem so! Thanks so much for reading.

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  20. Russell Gayer's avatar

    Reading the comments made me think of the movie “The Sixth Sense.” Well done, Karen.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      That is sort of like I imagined it for her. Thanks for reading and commenting Russell 🙂

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  21. athling2001's avatar

    I love the concept of a talk party and hope she is not crazy. Then again, what is crazy? Maybe thinking she is talking to those gone is how is how she copes. Beautiful.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      What IS crazy–that is a great question. Your comment made me smile. Thanks for reading!

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  22. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar

    I find the reaction to the name even more intriguing than the rest… who is she, and what secrets are there… ghosts always have a purpose.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      It seems like she might be after something for sure. Thanks for reading and commenting Bjorn.

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  23. Alicia Jamtaas's avatar

    The title of your piece says so much. It sounds as if she must have these “gatherings” often and it is indeed time to get a little help in discovering what is going on, especially since the unseen, invited guest is familiar.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Yes, it would be unsettling. Thanks for reading!

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  24. anuragbakhshi's avatar

    Spooky. I wonder what skeletons they’re hiding in their cupboards.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      I like the way you put that. Thanks for reading!

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  25. James McEwan's avatar

    It’s those empty chairs, who’s is sitting there. I love a good ghost story.

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    1. K. Rawson's avatar

      Thanks James. I love a ghost story too!

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  26. Brenda's Thoughts's avatar

    An intriguing spooky tale. I loved it! =)

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  27. spicedmullings's avatar

    Any mother would go pale.
    I could actually feel myself doing it. Good simple write!

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  28. Woman walking Max's avatar

    Great story – really liked using the perspective of Him & Her, observing the scene in the garden. Creepy ending, done with finesse.

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  29. mileysmith's avatar

    Interesting! When will we get the complete story?

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